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题目要求：
围绕沟通的意义写一篇小文章。简明阐述自己的观点。
字数要求：
200字以内
- 用户的作文（系统评分94.0分）
- 评语：
语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；作者句法知识掌握的错误，可适当增加从句的使用；作者词汇基础扎实，拼写也很棒。
- 用户练习作文：
Small wonder,in judging from what is detailedly demonstrated in the above pie chart,if we think hard enough,we can observe lucidly that it shows the people's attitudes concerning children's participation in commercial activities are quite far from the same.Generally,their attitudes can be divided into four parts-against,strongly negative,neutral and positive,which account for 50%,23% and 4% respectively.In total,most folks don't consent to the broad participation of children. When seeing the not uncommon phenomenon that citizens don't fairly agree to the seemingly fashionable trend,probably we have no better way to appreciate it than by studying the following influential factors.On the one hand,it is widely accepted that such commercial activities would affect children in certain ways,which include that children cannot spend much time on learning,and that such activities would bring some thoughts that don't belong to their growing stage into their minds.On the other hand,in the final analysis,parents who went through 20 century,cannot rather recognize with these new thoughts and economic pattern,which always stand counter to their values. Given the situation,I would not go that far therefore,I only advocate that we should take an objective view on it.Certainly,this has been an ongoing market trend grasping more and more public attention,which could not merely satisfy inhabitants'desire of entertainment but also guide children's growth to some extent.Nevertheless,we,as residents who are responsible for their progress,should take the issue into serious consideration and effectively analyze the benefits and drawbacks.
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- 回复2020-03-13 05:01:53jemmy02
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